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【原创范文】： {首段｝：背景介绍 + 作家立场 Such is human nature to explore the unknown. A trend is that numerous people are keen on embarking on challenging sports events such as mountain biking, rock climbing or scuba diving , especially among those dynamic young adults. My stand is that we should pursue excitement and sense of refreshment in the dull routine daily life. After all, life without risk is no life at all. 【解析】：Life without risk is no life at all 人生没有冒险就不能称其为人生。 {二段｝：正方观点的展开： Granted, many virtues could be gained via undertaking those risky sports activities. Primarily, the extreme adventures can be taken as an effective way to help players relieve their pressure and vent their negative emotions, for the occupied modern life often deprives one’s right of seeking relaxation. The popularity of bungee jumping accounts for risky sports’ significant function in terms of reducing stress. Imaginably, one’s working efficiency could be highly enhanced after doing his or her favorite sports events. Moreover, not only can the extreme adventures exert wholesome impacts , but it also could foster one’s skills, chasten one’s tenacity and forge one’s frustration toleration. Some extreme adventures, such as rock climbing and surfing, requires high techniques or much stamina . Ultimately, the extreme adventures could be developed into tempting tourism items, which could generate immense economic value. 【解析】： 1.The extreme adventures can be taken as an effective way to help players relieve their pressure and vent their negative emotions. 极限运动是一种很好的方式去帮助运动者缓解压力，释放不良情绪。 2. It also could foster one’s skills, chasten one’s tenacity and forge one’s frustration toleration. 极限运动同意可以培养人的技能，磨练人的坚韧，铸造人的挫折忍受能力。 {三段｝：反方观点的展开： Nonetheless, problems invariably ensue. One possible downside is that some perilous sports activities might become the roots of injuries and agonies. There exist high levels of injuries, which sometimes disables players and even ruins their lives. Another adverse aspect is that some intense extreme sports are merely an excuse for violence. To illustrate, boxing involves excessive violence and bloody contents so that it adversely influences adolescent Television viewers, namely, it might arouse their sadistic impulses. 【解析】： 1. Some intense extreme sports are merely an excuse for violence. 一些极限运动也许会成为暴力的借口。 2. It might arouse their sadistic impulses. 极限运动也许会诱发一个人施虐的冲动。 {尾段｝：再次亮明观点 + 提出建议 Personally, I encourage the extreme adventures, for it symbolizes freedom, so it is citizens’ elementary right to opt for his or her favorite sports activities. Attempts should be made to ensure risky sports events are thrilling, amusing and profit-making, however, to prevent accidents and injuries is highly recommended(328) 【解析】： Attempts should be made to ensure risky sports events are thrilling, amusing and profit-making. 我们应该做出努力去证极限运动是刺激的、有趣的、盈利的。 注解：本文8分，写作过程出现笔误，例如单复数、语序、冠词、缩写等瑕疵。现已修改，因此，现在的范文应为8.5分。文无定法，本篇以人称口吻谈及两种观点，主题明确、首尾呼应、自圆其说、有理有据、可为考生赏析之佳作。 (责任编辑：admin) |
