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南京朗阁小编就和大家一起来谈谈4大低分的开头类型，让我们一起避免这种写法。虽然说每年的雅思写作考试低分的人不在少数，其中能够让人看个开头就能让阅卷人给他的卷子判低分的人还真有，在有经验的雅思考官看来，你的文章是不 是抄的雅思作文模板一目了然，而且很多考官甚至看个开头就什么知道你这个考生是什么水平，后面写的再精彩也是在阅卷人心中大打折扣，所以开头的重要性不言 而喻， 种类型：罗里吧嗦 很多考生喜欢开头上来绕弯子，之乎者也的一大堆，全是在卖弄词汇量，其实根本没有实质内容，而且还有凑字数嫌疑。先举个失败的例子来说：Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married? This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married…… 即使凑字数也要凑的有技术含量一点吧…… 所以这种情况的治疗方法就是走和他完全相反的路线：开门见山。比如这样：In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。类似的病症还有这样的奇葩案例：Topic 2-The importance of environmental protection. Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important! 遇到这样的开头，阅卷人给低分都是轻的，没撕掉你的卷子就已经很不错了。 第二种情况：中式英文 典型失败案例：Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life. 我们接着来看一下失败案例的中文表达手法，In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily… 当然除了这种中文式的表达，常见的还有这样的，Topic 2- The population problem. The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there. 第三种情况：观点模糊 还有一种常见的情况，就是从来不标明自己的观点，从头到尾都没有提出很有论据的东西，雅思作文评分标准中的作文肯定是因为有出彩的观念。你比如如果写成了这样就注定失败：Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married? I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me…… 第四种情况：偏离主题 这种情况是很多考生的问题，本来写的就是一个话题，结果居然不知不觉中写跑偏了。例如这样的案例：Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places. 这个角度完全是相反的，话题的目的是让你说一说是否觉得现代大学教育在一个人的成功道路中必不可少，但是这位考生说的确是成功需要什么，通篇没有涉及大学教育的重要性，肯定是有一个低分。 (责任编辑：admin) |
